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I, Like the Rain by ~Slim-Beatnik:iconSlim-Beatnik:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Open


I envy the rain from the cloud above your house,
Spattering and sliding down the window of your room,
Because they are close to you crying yourself to sleep.

They prove the warmth of your house,
As I sit on a bench in the rain,
Every muscle contracted, but not shivering.

I’m sitting, soaked, trying to be the rain;
I’m trying to be as close to you as possible;
I’m trying to stay in your warmth.

And even if I didn’t want to be the rain,
I’d still be falling.
©2006-2009 ~Slim-Beatnik
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Author's Comments

Hint: The love is like a sweet lemon, and I don't mean yellow.

And before you ask, yes, I do rather enjoy the rain.

This is published, in the US and UK, you cannot steal it.

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~ummm321 Feb 24, 2006, 1:38:27 AM
i love this soooo much and i like rain too...

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~Terannella Feb 24, 2006, 3:38:17 AM
ooh, I like it...makes me shiver in a good way :-)

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Finding out who you are is half the fun...and all of the pain.
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~hiddenregret Feb 24, 2006, 5:05:30 AM
wow...im glad i know exactly what you mean.great way of putting it...i once heard a song by shania twain called jealous and your poem reminds me of this

" i wish i were the sun shining on your neck,caressing like a lover..." same kind of thoughts,u agree?

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A million to one outsiders nightblindness cant see,your bright eyes are what the time is;twenty-five past eternity.
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~Slim-Beatnik Feb 24, 2006, 10:28:59 AM
Something like that, but darker. It is at night, and raining.

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~Slim-Beatnik Feb 24, 2006, 10:29:21 AM
And thanks,
Thank you very much!

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~Slim-Beatnik Feb 24, 2006, 10:30:38 AM
Thank you.

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~Slim-Beatnik Feb 24, 2006, 10:45:20 AM
Thank you!



Though I've noticed people don't use shivering as it is supposed to.
The idea is that your muscles contact and relax quickly, but it won't make you warm unless you stop for a second.
Don't quite know why I'm throwing this out, but yeah, I'm slim and it's one of my way of staying warm.
You don't get anything from constant action, but when you stop for a second, that's when you really appreciate it.

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~LostAndInsecure Feb 24, 2006, 11:48:15 AM
I love the way you put it...
The rain on your skin is a way of telling you you're still alive and feeling.
And you put it into words marvelously.

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~Junky01 Feb 24, 2006, 11:53:15 AM
dude... i know what ya mean.. rain is the best damn thing next to snow.... just makes me feel so freakin refreshed, and alive..

id tell you this in person... but ill prolly forget next time i cya... lol

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~Slim-Beatnik Feb 24, 2006, 12:30:19 PM
Probably. I do agree though, snow is prefered - stupid weather.

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