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Alright by ~Slim-Beatnik:iconSlim-Beatnik:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Philosophical > Open


My mind bound past my pacing feet
As they crept to a suction upon the earth.

I can be comfortable with things.
I知 feeling alright.
No, I知 not.
But why?

Something misses my hands,
And all I grasp is hard air.

Directly after thinking it,
I knew it to be true.

I want to be alright with someone,
Because I want to be alright with myself.
©2006-2009 ~Slim-Beatnik
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Author's Comments

Self-realization while walking home over the pedestrian bridge.
A thought came to mind I knew it was true, perhaps more than I want it to be, but it stopped me for a second.

I think part of why people seek others is to make themselves feel ok - well, I think it is for me.

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:iconirishhippiepoet:
~IrishHippiePoet Jun 3, 2006, 3:34:20 PM
The ending...wow...almost brought me to tears. It reminded me of ..me actually. Good job.
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~awitchkitty Jun 3, 2006, 3:39:06 PM
Ahh, so you've written something, and it is indeed wonderful.

Oh man, do I ever know this feeling of frustration. There are times when I myself seek to find someone based on the fact that I feel I need someone to be happy. Those moments, when I actually catch myself, I stop and think "Why do I need someone to make me happy? Why can I not be happy just myself?" I think it takes great skill to be happy with just yourself, and I want that so badly, but have yet to find it.... So I sympathise, and sadly, relate.

It is wonderfully written, I love how it comes together, and the emotion shows brilliantly. Beautiful.

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"Hey! One of you is going to fall and die, and I'm not cleaning it up!" ~ Captain Malcom Reynolds (Firefly)
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~Slim-Beatnik Jun 3, 2006, 3:46:44 PM
Thank you very much!
Perhaps that's why we seek others.

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Neque porro quisquam est qui dolorem ipsum quia dolor sit amet, consectetur, adipisci velit...
There is no one who loves pain itself, who seeks after it and wants to have it, simply because it is pain...
~Poetic-Disturbance a little club I'm in.
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~IrishHippiePoet Jun 3, 2006, 3:49:30 PM
As I once sought you?
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~Slim-Beatnik Jun 3, 2006, 4:08:14 PM
As a fact, I have written, finally. I am more or less happy, it just kind of hit me.
Thank you very much!

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Neque porro quisquam est qui dolorem ipsum quia dolor sit amet, consectetur, adipisci velit...
There is no one who loves pain itself, who seeks after it and wants to have it, simply because it is pain...
~Poetic-Disturbance a little club I'm in.
:iconslim-beatnik:
~Slim-Beatnik Jun 3, 2006, 4:10:50 PM
In context of the poem, I meant more romatically. But then, in our own context, yes, I suppose.

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Neque porro quisquam est qui dolorem ipsum quia dolor sit amet, consectetur, adipisci velit...
There is no one who loves pain itself, who seeks after it and wants to have it, simply because it is pain...
~Poetic-Disturbance a little club I'm in.
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~cries-of-the-past Jun 3, 2006, 4:17:46 PM
That is so wonderful, how you put that into the simplest of words with the most complex feeling...Its allover so raw and true. I love it

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new deviantart: [link]
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~Slim-Beatnik Jun 3, 2006, 4:32:22 PM
Thank you very much!
Thanks for the specifics.

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Neque porro quisquam est qui dolorem ipsum quia dolor sit amet, consectetur, adipisci velit...
There is no one who loves pain itself, who seeks after it and wants to have it, simply because it is pain...
~Poetic-Disturbance a little club I'm in.
:iconunforgiven-soul:
~Unforgiven-soul Jun 3, 2006, 5:07:26 PM
love the emotion....alothought it's short it's a masterpiece well done

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~"Victums, Aren't we all?"~
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~Slim-Beatnik Jun 3, 2006, 5:08:03 PM
Thank you very much!

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Neque porro quisquam est qui dolorem ipsum quia dolor sit amet, consectetur, adipisci velit...
There is no one who loves pain itself, who seeks after it and wants to have it, simply because it is pain...
~Poetic-Disturbance a little club I'm in.
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